Sample script - Finding Her

The first two pages of my mini-comic, Finding Her, which is going to be a non-canon short story involving Voku and Nyura (and no she is not his sister, but someone just as important to him). Keep in mind that some things may change in editing, at least before I sit down and start drawing the comic. Without further ado, here's the sample:


Finding Her, One-shot – Melanee Wood

PAGE ONE

Panel 1. Establishing shot of a forest that is alongside a mountain. The forest has a mix of primarily deciduous trees with a few coniferous trees sprinkled in. It is near the start of dawn as a small light has appeared in the horizon.

Panel 2. Cut to of a long shot of the inside of the forest where there is the sight of predominately tree trunks, although the tree branches are hanging from above. Along the forest floor, there are dead leaves, ferns, stick, dirt, rock, and small shoots of grass coating it.

Panel 3. Close-up on the forest floor, angled downward.

Panel 4. Same close-up on the forest floor, except a nose and a single paw appears into the panel. The nose is black while part of the animal’s muzzle is black and blue. The paw is also black.

Panel 5. Same close-up as before, but now, more of the animal’s muzzle appears in the frame along with both of its feet, which are all black save for two sky blue rectangular bands close to his paws.


PAGE TWO

Panel 1. In medium-long shot, it is revealed that the creature is a Vaarg, but not just any Vaarg. It is Voku, one of two main protagonists from The Guardians. His head is craned upward and is looking towards his right. He is obviously looking for something, or rather someone.

Panel 2. Voku takes off running in that direction.

Panel 3. Voku then grinds to a halt just short of the opening within a group of trees.

Panel 4. He then takes a step closer to the clearing. He’s being very cautious as though not sure what to expect.

Panel 5. Medium close-up on Voku as his eyes widen with mild surprise.

Repost: Looking for a Beta Reader

Basically, I'm looking for a Beta Reader to edit and make any suggestions for one of my novels I'm currently working on called City of the Ferrets. The first thirteen chapters are roughly completed but am going back to rewrite some parts of chapter one. I also might even provide both versions of the same chapter to see which parts work and which doesn't.

The main criteria as far as what I'm looking for in a Beta reader is someone with enough experience in editing and critiquing other people's work. As well as have some patience with me as I've already completed 13 chapters, plus two more after chapter 14. At this time, I'm projecting around 17 to 18 chapters total for the book. Right now I'm struggling to rewrite chapter 14 and may end up splitting it into two. So if I'm taking longer than expected, that means I'm busy with my personal life, mostly school, or am on writer's block until I can come up with a new idea that works for the story and finish the chapter. Lastly, have to have good writing skills, in other words good grammar, spelling, and punctuation. No netspeak, improper grammar, or anything of that nature.

With those few things in mind and if you think you have what it takes as a Beta Reader, either send me a private message or email me at jadedillusions@gmail.com. Please do so soon as I want to get this, and potentially another future project, off the ground. For a little more information, go to my journal link I've provided at the top.